Hi there!
Great to see another take
It's a bit better but unfortunately You loose lot of notes - especially alll last notes of each shape. It's harder to quickly switch to different position but it's not ok to sacrifice last note to have more time for position shift. Also...playing on the clean tone is not a solution. It's just hidding the problem that is still there. I think You should try it with distortion to get most of the profits from this lesson.
Two things You should really focus on:
1. First finger (left hand) always touching the strings that are above the one You play
2. Focus on left hand shape shortle before every position shift so You will have sort of template ready to use as soon as You move Your hand to the right position.