He mate! Nice to see You working hard constantly
Your hand positions look very well - also right hand movements but...There is still headroom to improve precission. Sometimes I can hear A note in the background, while You play E power chord (0:03 -0:04; 0:07 for example) - try to focus on it so the 3rd string would be muted instead of making a sus4 chor for a while.
At 0:04 You had some problems to precisely grab that shape.
When there are breaks between chords it should be perfect silence - it's to much noise from moving hands outthere 0:15 - 0:18
There are also little timming issues - I think this could be more a matter of focusing then practice
Take a look at Bens original lesson - he does the second half (first pattern) with the upstrokes as an opposite to the first part (downstrokes)
Ben uses pretty high gain at his lesson and You can hear some noises at breaks but those are only "slide noises". You use low amount of gain that is possible to get 100% clean breaks
Try to think about it once You play the lesson again.
Your mechnisms of both hands are very good - You are already used to make a "noise gate" of both hands - now it's only a matter to increase the treshold