Hey man,
I must congratulate you on your first REC - it is the first, right? What I will say is that you should focus on emulating the lesson as close to the original recording as possible, as in this moment, it seems like you have added some parts from yourself in the end.
Here are my observations:
0:38, 0:50 - the notes here were a bit muffled
0:54 - you hesitated a bit and were offbeat.
0:57 - this part isn't played in the lesson - I think you just forgot where it went and doubled it till you remembered, eh?
Not a bad trick at all, but in this context, I don't think it's allowed
Please re-record this focusing on the mentioned observations and playing the exact lesson and you just might get that 10
Cosmin