Hey buddy!
I am honored you chose this one
See, it might not seem as a complicated piece but the atmosphere created in the beginning for instance relies in the timing - the notes are delayed in comparison with the tempo. I also notice you have altered the lead phrases a bit - I don't know if you did it on purpose or by accident though
At 1:40-1:41 timing is a little bit shaky and not in harmony with the drums. I think you could focus on these details for a second take and in general, pay attention to the details - it's a thing I noticed in time, regarding your takes.
All the best,
Cosmin